Sailing the wine dark sea
I like this! Great atmosphere to it, I could almost feel the fog swirling around me as I read it.
Spooky! I know you said "Skid Row", but could be Whitechapel!
vivid...life in the shadows can be that way...
A shady little diddy.
Sheilagh Lee said I love the use of Skid row.you could picture it all.
Ya know if I were a mugger you would have given me the perfect scenarioLove your lightheartedness in a foggy day.
dark, yet fun
Vivid and dark ....
That's what a Mugger is supposed to do..well did he..
I love the tension you creating in just a few lines.
Very atmospheric & entertaining poem; but a mugger wouldn't find much worthwhile on skid row - would he?
Thanks for reading and for the comments, guys! As it happens Old Altonian, I had the word "killer" in place of "mugger", right up to the final draft, when I changed it. I pulled the punch at the last minute. Somehow, it seems to fit more with a noir atmosphere, rather than being a clear Jack the Ripper homage which "killer" would have invoked. Too far in the other direction?
Great use of the words
tight piece. you painted an intense picture...both visually and emotionally
Well done; your poem /swirls with tension and thick fog, /waiting for the punch.http://beespoetry.wordpress.com/2011/05/23/a-good-man/I went light this week, because last week's (Romeo Before Juliet) wasn't my best work.
magical capture of your sentiments, way to go,share a piece with us today.
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