Looking for readers of a zombie story

My zombie story is finished. Or at least I think it is. It's ~3500 words.

I'd like to get a couple of opinions on it. Comments on the pacing, the action, the language, etc. would be welcome. Something like this.

As with everything I write, I'm concerned that the story's merits are outweighed by its flaws. That is to say, I'm afraid it stinks. If it does, I'd like to have a clearer understanding of why it stinks, so I can do better next time.

If I thought that anyone reads this blog, this would be the point at which I would ask for volunteers, offer a critique in return, etc. Since this is an isolated backyard, facing the old freight tracks adjacent to a depopulated cul-de-sac, I'm going to have to find readers somewhere else.


  1. I would like to read your story, dear sir. I might even finish one of my own one of these days for you to critique... as you might have ascertained from this statement: i'm not actually a writer myself, but I am, however, a very knowledgable reader, with a university degree and a fair command of the english language.

    If you are interested, you can reach me as @iGniSz on twitter.... or at j dot terhove at gmail dot com.

    Btw the link you supplied is not really working for me (not authorized) but if you would give me the contents I would be happy to oblige you in you preference of answer structure.

  2. Thanks, iGniSz. I've gotten some feedback on this one, so I think I have an idea of what still needs to be done with it, but I'd be interested in your comments. I posted the content of the critique link here.

    Look for an e.mail shortly.


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