tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post9014874680938280985..comments2024-03-08T15:14:31.312-05:00Comments on Landless: #FridayFlash: Nearer Comes the MoonTony Nolandhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.comBlogger24125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-22840545587862231132010-04-21T06:17:57.556-04:002010-04-21T06:17:57.556-04:00Thank you, Josie. There's a lot of scene poure...Thank you, <b>Josie</b>. There's a lot of scene poured into this; I'm glad it resonated with you!Tony Nolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-1887909080702384422010-04-20T14:25:19.283-04:002010-04-20T14:25:19.283-04:00I've just read your writing for the first time...I've just read your writing for the first time today - I followed @skycycler's link on Twitter and wish I'd done it before now! This piece speaks to me so deeply - I've always longed to be able to fly. I look forward to reading more of your work. Beautiful use of language and description. <br />JosieJosie @safetycomforthttp://safetycomfort.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-74237075130810742102009-10-16T01:38:55.984-04:002009-10-16T01:38:55.984-04:00I really enjoyed this one, Tony! :DI really enjoyed this one, Tony! :DMerchttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14164221022350926808noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-23047330420056861072009-09-07T09:07:25.944-04:002009-09-07T09:07:25.944-04:00Thanks to all of the weekend readers for such grea...Thanks to all of the weekend readers for such great comments!<br /><br />This was a fun piece to write. I've been feeling a bit down lately, lost in the thickets and byways in larger WIPs. #FridayFlash was a terrific way to stretch a bit with a pure fantasy piece. Although I recognize "cleansing the palate" as a cliche (and therefore verboten), that describes the experience perfectly.<br /><br />It's analogous to how your computer gets slower and slower the longer it's been running (Mac & Linus users, you'll just have to trust me on this one). Shutting down and rebooting gets it all running as smoothly as ever.<br /><br />Oh, damn. "Pushing the reset button" is a cliche, too!Tony Nolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-47614089641564920312009-09-07T06:12:34.541-04:002009-09-07T06:12:34.541-04:00Welcome to #fridayflash. Really enjoyed this piece...Welcome to #fridayflash. Really enjoyed this piece. A flight of pure fancy. The description of his emergence into space and the various shapes he threw himself into was vivid stuff. I also liked how he cooled himself upon re-entry. Well paced and intriguing piece of realist-fantasy. Good stuff.dan powellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14131553102349479513noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-44806848529081467492009-09-06T22:34:13.177-04:002009-09-06T22:34:13.177-04:00Nice story - good imagery, lots of unanswered ques...Nice story - good imagery, lots of unanswered questions. I like it like that. Well done.Alanhttp://www.alanbaxteronline.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-43048898709813331562009-09-06T16:37:43.257-04:002009-09-06T16:37:43.257-04:00More! More! More!More! More! More!Anthony Deaverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09746700165087364279noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-5341002048656383292009-09-06T12:13:16.293-04:002009-09-06T12:13:16.293-04:00I can quite understand why he always asked the que...I can quite understand why he always asked the question and always got the same answer. Even before I got to the end I read him as someone who had made a sacrifice along with his choice, the night excursions are a need but at the same time a teasing reminder of what he has given up.<br />Anyway... I loved your writing style and your imagination. Thanks.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-84024822486030489692009-09-05T20:20:44.974-04:002009-09-05T20:20:44.974-04:00I found myself holding my breath. A wonderful stor...I found myself holding my breath. A wonderful story. I hope I get to read more... on Fridays :-)<br />~2Tomara Armstronghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17185889402088565686noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-73798230818122100292009-09-05T14:53:02.055-04:002009-09-05T14:53:02.055-04:00evocative and tightly written. well done.evocative and tightly written. well done.Michael Solenderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01120045114297450520noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-68551212829698442672009-09-05T12:47:05.360-04:002009-09-05T12:47:05.360-04:00Oh, man, judy b took my point. I also really loved...Oh, man, judy b took my point. I also really loved the line, "leaving his home to return to his house."<br /><br />At first this gave me the sense of Peter Pan. Who would not want to fly up to (towards) the moon? Then I get the sense of the forlorn. Is he blessed or is he cursed? Wonderful questions to leave the reader with.<br /><br />At least between full moons he seems to be relatively happy. Really interesting piece, and very vividly told.<br />~jonJ. M. Strotherhttp://www.jmstrother.com/tiki-view_blog.php?blogId=1noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-57779918124484763032009-09-05T08:38:26.469-04:002009-09-05T08:38:26.469-04:00@ everyone: Thanks for reading the piece; I've...<b>@ everyone:</b> Thanks for reading the piece; I've so glad you all liked it. I appreciate everyone's comments. The imagery worked pretty well here - a good thing, since the plot is minimal and the characters are only sketched with a few lines. There are deep waters here, I'm sure, but I'm not sure what they are. I think this will be a question unanswered, as this is supposed to be a stand-alone piece, rather than the germ of a larger story. (Sorry <b>Shannon Esposito</b>!)<br /><br />What's interesting to me is the mystical/magical interpretation of the central character, when I actually had more of an alien/android sense in mind as I wrote it.<br /><br />I especially like <b>Anton Gullly</b>'s comment about seeing something new in successive readings. That's exactly what I was hoping to achieve, so Anton, because your comment was so insightful, I completely forgive the whole "hen-pecked" thing.<br /><br />Here's a question for you all to consider: at the end, <b><i>"As he always did, he decided that had made the right choice."</i></b> If it really is the right choice, why does he have to keep asking himself the question? Is he just kidding himself, or rationalizing, or what?Tony Nolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-44452047616468525882009-09-05T08:37:18.044-04:002009-09-05T08:37:18.044-04:00This comment has been removed by the author.Tony Nolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-56547488032252601562009-09-04T21:39:13.437-04:002009-09-04T21:39:13.437-04:00Inventive! I enjoyed it. I found this line quite p...Inventive! I enjoyed it. I found this line quite poignant: "...leaving his home to return to his house."judy b.http://www.onzeproductions.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-82755821976323359142009-09-04T17:36:51.524-04:002009-09-04T17:36:51.524-04:00Wonderfully crafted imagery. I guess you don'...Wonderfully crafted imagery. I guess you don't have to be human to make sacrifices for love.Chris Chartrandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09766438158698041660noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-71865204391771938752009-09-04T16:24:50.241-04:002009-09-04T16:24:50.241-04:00What is he?
Hen-pecked, clearly.
He's so und...What is he?<br /><br />Hen-pecked, clearly.<br /><br />He's so under the thumb he thinks fingerprints are sky.<br /><br />whip-a whip-a<br /><br />I'll stop now.<br /><br />Brilliant story. I was definitely confused, but in a good way, as if there was a bigger story I didn't grasp, or it might have been a smaller story I missed. I've re-read it five times and feel different every time. Superb.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-57533533916726245072009-09-04T15:35:29.422-04:002009-09-04T15:35:29.422-04:00Very original! And I guess you just answered my qu...Very original! And I guess you just answered my question. What is he???!! I thought, vampire? demon? god? Nope, your own creation. Intriguing, too, because he obviously can love and he can understand the value of human life (even above his thirst for moonlight, stars and sun) though he's not human. Would like to read more about him. <br />Continuation, maybe?? :-)<br />Beautiful story.Shannon Espositohttp://murderinparadise.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-5447637480931588862009-09-04T12:40:27.411-04:002009-09-04T12:40:27.411-04:00Thanks, everybody, I'm glad you liked the piec...Thanks, everybody, I'm glad you liked the piece!<br /><br />As for who (or what) this guy is, where he comes from and why he felt he had to wait for his wife to be asleep before he slipped out, I'm afraid I don't know. He didn't tell me.Tony Nolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-90967273374422589582009-09-04T11:55:38.935-04:002009-09-04T11:55:38.935-04:00Wouldn't be easy to choose between the beauty ...Wouldn't be easy to choose between the beauty of the Universe and a wife. I agree with the other comments, you created some very lovely imagery :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-45584003124866064342009-09-04T10:31:03.543-04:002009-09-04T10:31:03.543-04:00I loved the imagery. You have a gift for descripti...I loved the imagery. You have a gift for description, and I liked the ending. Great job!Cat Russellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14160039271069426174noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-23885658855843892992009-09-04T10:00:43.147-04:002009-09-04T10:00:43.147-04:00What a lovely piece. The imagery is beautiful, and...What a lovely piece. The imagery is beautiful, and you convey his feeling of alienation very well. I look forward to reading more of your work.<br /><br />Nicely done!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05660181882760446931noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-62964536738800152182009-09-04T08:32:26.014-04:002009-09-04T08:32:26.014-04:00A wonderful story of a stranger-in-a-strange-land...A wonderful story of a <i> stranger-in-a-strange-land </i>!<br /><br />Well done!Marisa Birnshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17945909737147497606noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-55277512788262837552009-09-04T08:14:55.683-04:002009-09-04T08:14:55.683-04:00Wonderful imagery! I thoroughly enjoyed the story....Wonderful imagery! I thoroughly enjoyed the story. Welcome to #fridayflash!Laura Enohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09982794146667832204noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-46215532013965456802009-09-04T06:14:23.650-04:002009-09-04T06:14:23.650-04:00Hi there. This blew me away. Your writing is beaut...Hi there. This blew me away. Your writing is beautiful, this is visionary and visual and visceral. I may be a bit dense, but I didn't quite get the last two lines. Does she know? Is that why he picked the right one. Then why didn't he want her to know he was going?<br /><br />My confusion in no way dents my enthusiasm for this fine piece of writing. <br /><br />Niggly bits: you have one typo in para 4 that you will want to fix. Also paras 2 & 3 both start with 'once'. Paras 4 and 5 start with 'he'. You might just want to mix up your sentence construction a little.<br /><br />Well done. Gorgeous stuff.Lily Mulhollandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09804113718224654006noreply@blogger.com