Comments on Landless: #FridayFlash: Just Because

This is a bone-breaker, mostly because it's mu...

2012-01-29T20:25:00.011-05:00

This is a bone-breaker, mostly because it's much more slice-of-life than it is unlikely fiction. I appreciate your comment!

This was a bit of an experiment in styles, Deanna....

2012-01-29T20:23:30.607-05:00

This was a bit of an experiment in styles, Deanna. I'm glad you liked it.

Thank you, Tom! Read in reverse chronological orde...

2012-01-29T20:22:45.878-05:00

Thank you, Tom! Read in reverse chronological order, there is a deadening sense of the inescapable, isn't there?

Every action has a cause. Following them backwards...

2012-01-29T20:21:16.574-05:00

Every action has a cause. Following them backwards in time is like watching a train wreck that just gets worse and worse.

Just the facts, ma'am.

2012-01-29T20:20:22.325-05:00

Just the facts, ma'am.

Thanks, Lee-Ann! This was much more spare than a l...

2012-01-29T20:19:58.001-05:00

Thanks, Lee-Ann! This was much more spare than a lot of my work.

A hole in the bucket, dear Liza... except I did it...

2012-01-29T20:19:23.434-05:00

A hole in the bucket, dear Liza... except I did it *backwards*! I think you're the only one who took the last line in that way, Cathy, but that's why I write stuff like this, so you can find lots of things in it. ;-)

Thanks for reading, Helen.

2012-01-29T20:17:47.518-05:00

Thanks for reading, Helen.

Thanks, Carrie! I whittled away almost every adorn...

2012-01-29T20:17:20.447-05:00

Thanks, Carrie! I whittled away almost every adornment for this one, left just the bare branches.

There's a sense of the events rushing on, inev...

2012-01-29T20:16:16.759-05:00

There's a sense of the events rushing on, inevitable, isn't there?

Thanks, Jack!

2012-01-29T20:15:26.530-05:00

Thanks, Jack!

Powerful, gritty and great - well done Mr Noland, ...

2012-01-29T18:35:02.863-05:00

Powerful, gritty and great - well done Mr Noland, another work of art

I can't help but recall "there's a re...

2012-01-29T12:03:29.481-05:00

I can't help but recall "there's a reason for everything". This is very different for you Tony, and I like it - a lot!

Sparse, hard, brutal truth in under 20 lines. The ...

2012-01-29T10:14:08.788-05:00

Sparse, hard, brutal truth in under 20 lines. The relentlessness of cause, effect and consequence is suffocatingly good..
Great work Tony.

It's amazing to see the ripples caused by a si...

2012-01-28T18:23:23.597-05:00

It's amazing to see the ripples caused by a single event. Powerful stuff.

Joe Friday meets the Butterfly Effect. Well done.

2012-01-28T07:35:55.509-05:00

Joe Friday meets the Butterfly Effect. Well done.

It doesn't seem that it hindered your storytel...

2012-01-28T01:14:05.435-05:00

It doesn't seem that it hindered your storytelling ability at all, Tony.

Simple yet brilliant... The circle of "life&q...

2012-01-27T22:55:28.761-05:00

Simple yet brilliant... The circle of "life".

OK, I admit it, I laughed out loud at the ending. ...

2012-01-27T22:31:43.877-05:00

OK, I admit it, I laughed out loud at the ending. I KNOW! I'M SICK!
I was reading along thinking of that old song "There's a hole in my bucket, dear Liza ..." and I was admiring how you layered each tragedy on top of the one previous. And it was all so serious... and then the line about the cell phone. It made me laugh! Brilliant ending! I mean it!
I am SO not going to show my kids this story or they'll be using it in their campaigns for cell phones.

Sad how all these events in individuals lives colo...

2012-01-27T22:28:39.435-05:00

Sad how all these events in individuals lives colour how they react in their own. The choice we make can often be influenced by what we are exposed to. Interesting flash Tony.

Damn Tony. This was sharp!

2012-01-27T21:33:19.735-05:00

Damn Tony. This was sharp!

It's like watching the water spin down the sin...

2012-01-27T20:25:39.154-05:00

It's like watching the water spin down the sink into oblivion.
Adam B @revhappiness

Short, sharp and dark. Nice work, Tony.

2012-01-27T20:13:24.661-05:00

Short, sharp and dark. Nice work, Tony.

Thank you, Aaron. The spare, backward, cold fluore...

2012-01-27T20:01:05.780-05:00

Thank you, Aaron. The spare, backward, cold fluorescent bulb way of relating this helps the mounting horror of it. It's a creepy life history.

The effects spreading like ripples in an oil slick...

2012-01-27T19:59:44.400-05:00

The effects spreading like ripples in an oil slick, ranging forward for generations...