tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post2639311662980820337..comments2024-03-08T15:14:31.312-05:00Comments on Landless: #FridayFlash: Just Enough PowerTony Nolandhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.comBlogger45125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-66189175248992625132012-12-06T13:00:19.083-05:002012-12-06T13:00:19.083-05:00Nice way to start a fiction- bloody from jump!Nice way to start a fiction- bloody from jump!Merrell Michaelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08781605191263915802noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-84249087335272636602010-03-29T12:46:00.088-04:002010-03-29T12:46:00.088-04:00Thanks, everyone! The cigar tip caught the attenti...Thanks, everyone! The cigar tip caught the attention of several people, almost as many as the glass of scotch. That was a fun detail to write, to show the Acrobat thinking for a moment about what she just said.<br /><br />I'm kind of pleased with this story, y'know?Tony Nolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-47085772517756271532010-03-29T07:09:26.934-04:002010-03-29T07:09:26.934-04:00Oh yes - this is good! And what a lovely lady, so ...Oh yes - this is good! And what a lovely lady, so polite and gracious in executing her orders. Great stuff, Tony.<br />Simon.Skycyclerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17412698481175267626noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-60146527699363409302010-03-28T10:54:42.040-04:002010-03-28T10:54:42.040-04:00Oh, Tony. This was good. This was very, very good....Oh, Tony. This was good. This was very, very good. My favourite line: "The tip of the Acrobat's cigar brightened and dimmed." Such a small detail, but it goes a long way in creating mood and keeping the pace. Bravo!Lauritahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03688820247531607677noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-80331818130522351802010-03-27T20:34:55.603-04:002010-03-27T20:34:55.603-04:00Oh my goodness, anything like this that has to do ...Oh my goodness, anything like this that has to do with the brain creeps me out, so this certainly will be with me for a while! Enjoyed, Tony.Lou Freshwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08849342766852653969noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-34872542632970091792010-03-27T14:59:09.199-04:002010-03-27T14:59:09.199-04:00Amazing story I love the interplay between the two...Amazing story I love the interplay between the two characters and could literally hear the fear in his voice when he begged to be killed.Randilinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10560902510382820057noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-47830529903615975842010-03-27T10:57:55.643-04:002010-03-27T10:57:55.643-04:00Meaty, full of intrigue, great visuals and not too...Meaty, full of intrigue, great visuals and not too much fat to be trimmed. I think this is the best thing I've seen you produce for #fridayflash. <br /><br />Well done.<br />:0)Karen from Mentorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03685540761526680384noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-45564466336397528992010-03-27T10:40:24.504-04:002010-03-27T10:40:24.504-04:00Wow! Tony, you are smokin' That was amazing in...Wow! Tony, you are smokin' That was amazing in detail & suspense - definitely a strong female character! Reading the comments was interesting too.<br /><br />You really have something here!Anne Tyler Lordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16909141266966569378noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-88387100241330595682010-03-27T08:07:53.525-04:002010-03-27T08:07:53.525-04:00Well written and enjoyable story!Well written and enjoyable story!Weezelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04441857346642599256noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-30664352609812745392010-03-27T07:47:52.884-04:002010-03-27T07:47:52.884-04:00Cecilia: That's interesting, as I thought abou...<b>Cecilia</b>: That's interesting, as I thought about these cellular structures, I don't see them as being localized in the brain. More organelles than organs. As for my imagination, well, the more jury-rigged the machine, the more interesting sounds it makes.<br /><br /><b>Trev</b>: Now, now, keep it clean...<br /><br /><b>Tomara</b>: She is fairly substantial in the "kick-ass" department, isn't she?<br /><br /><b>Shannon</b>: Those details sketch the whole man, don't they? You have no idea how long it took me to write those two lines, btw. Well, no, the scotch in a chipped glass was easy, but the cigar was HARD. I kept bumping up against "a cigar lit with a lighter", a tautology. It took me FOREVER to come up with another verb form to express lighting a cigar. I'm pretty happy with the result.<br /><br /><i>I want to read more about this girl and what she's got up her sleeve. She's obviously too smart to be doing this kind of work without her own motives.<br /><br />This is screaming to be more than flash!</i><br /><br />I am occupied today with considering the details of exactly how to do this.Tony Nolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-38129286910234509562010-03-26T23:45:19.513-04:002010-03-26T23:45:19.513-04:00WooHOO! Another one for the badASS chicks!
Love i...WooHOO! Another one for the badASS chicks!<br /><br />Love it!<br />~2Tomara Armstronghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17185889402088565686noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-27228032972791644502010-03-26T23:11:46.418-04:002010-03-26T23:11:46.418-04:00Wow. First of all, nice job showing what kind of c...Wow. First of all, nice job showing what kind of character this joker has with the chipped glass and plastic lighter. I suppose when you're dealing with people that could send that kind of assissin after you, it would be a good idea to pay attention and care about the details of life. <br /><br />And second of all...wow! I want to read more about this girl and what she's got up her sleeve. She's obviously too smart to be doing this kind of work without her own motives.<br /><br />This is screaming to be more than flash! Wonderful job.shannonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17063218369150683990noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-91431751738393515232010-03-26T21:25:29.060-04:002010-03-26T21:25:29.060-04:00Calm, naked, and dangerous. Reminds me of...neverm...Calm, naked, and dangerous. Reminds me of...nevermind. Nice tight story arc, and well paced reveal.trevhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10930957143736509429noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-31552104308788984922010-03-26T18:48:21.842-04:002010-03-26T18:48:21.842-04:00Great job, Tony! I wouldn't call her talent &q...Great job, Tony! I wouldn't call her talent "minor," although she has obviously been well-trained in it. I like the idea of scanners that can pick up on structures in the brain that produce it. Your imagination never ceases to astound me. :)<br /><br />CDCecilia Dominichttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12799727636246434837noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-70029205974721467882010-03-26T15:53:58.417-04:002010-03-26T15:53:58.417-04:00Eric, Icy, Dana: Thanks for reading, glad you like...<b>Eric, Icy, Dana</b>: Thanks for reading, glad you liked it!<br /><br />Dana: I'm reluctant to dig in and explain what I meant (I hate it when stories can't stand on their own), so let me quote instead:<br /><i>"Like I said, it's a very minor Talent, a rudimentary form of shielding."<br /><br />...<br /><br />"Again, I call bullshit. If you had power sufficient to project a bulletproof shield, I'd know it."</i><br /><br />OK?Tony Nolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-90748201917923367012010-03-26T15:45:49.809-04:002010-03-26T15:45:49.809-04:00Ooo neat. Well-written and good pacing.
I'...Ooo neat. Well-written and good pacing. <br /><br />I'm not entirely clear on exactly what her power is, though. Minor telekinesis?Danahttp://pixelenvy.ca/cgi/fff.cginoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-20507750636085994652010-03-26T15:43:53.500-04:002010-03-26T15:43:53.500-04:00Awesome. Simply awesome.Awesome. Simply awesome.Icy Sedgwickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-60308649243220218802010-03-26T14:32:38.864-04:002010-03-26T14:32:38.864-04:00Excellent story. Great action and description. Wel...Excellent story. Great action and description. Well done!Eric J. Krausehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05774468607814244185noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-59357152408580059092010-03-26T11:03:09.472-04:002010-03-26T11:03:09.472-04:00Linda: Raisin Bran, actually, but it has much the ...<b>Linda</b>: Raisin Bran, actually, but it has much the same effect.<br /><br /><b>Carrie</b>: Your comment thrills me almost as much as it terrifies me. It's a complicated response, which deserves a blog post of its own to discuss.<br /><br /><b>John</b>: I'm glad you liked the scotch. Often, noir will use the old saw about an ill-fitting suit to sketch a character. This was a bit of a twist on that. Re: the ending, she said that she was going to leave him alive, but destroy his language processing ability. This will be the last question he'll ever be able to formulate because in a few moments, he won't be able to use words anymore.<br /><br /><b>Ali Fraser</b>: Sorry, man. There are so many ways I can annoy people, I'm just trying to cover all the bases. 8-)<br /><br /><b>Michael</b>: Thank you! I'll start hunting around for an appropriate venue.<br /><br /><b>Mazzz in Leeds, Marc Nash, Jodi Cleghorn</b>: She works for him, but he doesn't "control" her. For that matter, although she's a conscientious employee committed to quality workmanship, that doesn't mean that she's *happy* working for him. As it turns out, Tong is not really a very good boss; he tends not to reward his top performers commensurate with their demonstrated ability. He fosters interpersonal competition, rather than teamwork. As you might suspect, this lowers morale among his staff.<br /><br />I will reveal the consequences of that management style in a future story.Tony Nolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-49330912163828699432010-03-26T07:47:50.946-04:002010-03-26T07:47:50.946-04:00Cool - excellent superpower!
I will shock myself ...Cool - excellent superpower!<br /><br />I will shock myself by disagreeing with John W, I thought the part with the last question he would be able to form made perfect sense<br /><br />Like Marc, I too am wondering how Mr Tong controls her - cool charactermazzz in Leedshttp://mazzz-in-leeds.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-60997030621193548352010-03-26T06:58:45.556-04:002010-03-26T06:58:45.556-04:00One of your best if not the best - submit immediat...One of your best if not the best - submit immediately for publicationMichael Solenderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01120045114297450520noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-83238824724740772952010-03-26T03:09:48.775-04:002010-03-26T03:09:48.775-04:00Don't take this personally, Tony, but your abi...Don't take this personally, Tony, but your ability to churn out brilliant stories week after week is seriously getting on my nerves.Ali Frasernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-22148390462626009282010-03-26T01:57:51.290-04:002010-03-26T01:57:51.290-04:00I dig strong females that act with aplomb, even wh...I dig strong females that act with aplomb, even when naked and at a disadvangtage.<br /><br />Great story.peggyhttp://pegjet.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-11478356259532457002010-03-25T23:57:54.251-04:002010-03-25T23:57:54.251-04:00This has one of my favorite openings you've wr...This has one of my favorite openings you've written in a while, Tony. There's just enough unique wording, like scotch being measured in inches, to lend body to raw description and setting up of items and details. Detached item description also just works there.<br /><br />The ending confused me. He refuses to kill the Acrobat, but the second to last paragraph says, "Intelligence fading, his eyes formed the last question he would ever have the capacity to ask." That sure sounds like the Acrobat is dying, in which case, "Kill me" was granted, just slowly. Feels dischordant, like I'm missing something but I can't pick it up on re-reads.<br /><br />Also, "The Acrobat" is a neat name.John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-81062921344270857812010-03-25T23:21:45.444-04:002010-03-25T23:21:45.444-04:00Damn Tony, you're a goddamn genius. Stop under...Damn Tony, you're a goddamn genius. Stop underplaying your talent. You are amazing. I want to see you get serious. You're so ready for it.Carrie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05093923008179106837noreply@blogger.com