tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post260511799945069059..comments2024-03-08T15:14:31.312-05:00Comments on Landless: #FridayFlash: When the Room Stops SpinningTony Nolandhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.comBlogger32125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-41003848422593496992011-03-28T21:00:13.505-04:002011-03-28T21:00:13.505-04:00Where's this coming from? Disturbing. I like. ...Where's this coming from? Disturbing. I like. : )Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00038885104845754639noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-63490382279316459572011-03-27T15:44:58.361-04:002011-03-27T15:44:58.361-04:00Hanging on to "sanity" - by a fraying th...Hanging on to "sanity" - by a fraying thread. And possibly likely to lose in the end.<br /><br />Terrible (in its true meaning) voice in this, Tony. Very well captured.<br /><br />Excellent stuff.KjMhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17691028465137798738noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-48307611411440112492011-03-27T15:32:35.075-04:002011-03-27T15:32:35.075-04:00Thanks so much for all of your comments, everyone....Thanks so much for all of your comments, everyone. This piece was written as many of them are: I took some of my own experience of life (dislocation, alienation, wondering what people thought of me, self-doubts, etc.) and followed it to an extreme conclusion.<br /><br />For most people, this piece is a freakshow and little more. For some, it's deeply disturbing because they know or have met such people as this. For a few, they know that, had things gone a little differently in their lives, they would BE such a person as this. For those readers, this piece rings truer than is comfortable.<br /><br />I'm glad you guys found it interesting, moving and/or affective. Bless you all for reading and commenting. It means the world to me.Tony Nolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-14411027870253318902011-03-26T19:38:51.425-04:002011-03-26T19:38:51.425-04:00Good story! I'm sure when some people isolate ...Good story! I'm sure when some people isolate themselves from humanity and only use the Internet to view the outside world, these thoughts come to them.Eric J. Krausehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05774468607814244185noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-10880912433537674552011-03-26T16:10:16.746-04:002011-03-26T16:10:16.746-04:00As I've been following MCM's latest livewr...As I've been following MCM's latest livewriting jaunt, it is now 4am in the morning (with one final hour to go). This is a BAD time to be reading your latest Friday Flash. <br /><br />I imagine most people who have ever experienced depression or mood swings can relate to the process of distancing yourself from your thoughts but still feeling somewhat trapped by them regardless.<br /><br />Powerfully written, and even stronger in unreality due to the time at which I'm reading. Don't do it again, or I might have to listen to the voices and teach you a lesson.WA_sidehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16583614878422254534noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-28602799886710311472011-03-26T15:31:34.069-04:002011-03-26T15:31:34.069-04:00The funny, but not funny thing at all is that ther...The funny, but not funny thing at all is that there might be people like your character out there. *shudders* <br /><br />Great story.Marihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07303695124956391293noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-30359510747865214542011-03-26T12:53:54.441-04:002011-03-26T12:53:54.441-04:00Apart from the idea, which is great, i think it yo...Apart from the idea, which is great, i think it your style here which is most effective. The short sentences and repetition really work for me. They make your mc's mental state all the more real. Great flash again this week.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-37541774476335255782011-03-26T11:02:35.291-04:002011-03-26T11:02:35.291-04:00Projecting feelings into inanimate objects that re...Projecting feelings into inanimate objects that reflect our own depression and self-loathing. I might find this funnier if I hadn't been there. You captured it perfectly... to the point where I'm feeling VERY glad I'm not there anymore.Monica Marierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03112762564137354581noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-82523556969252846002011-03-25T23:46:55.167-04:002011-03-25T23:46:55.167-04:00Funny how a piece of technology dictates our lives...Funny how a piece of technology dictates our lives. Without it, our lives might be poorer for the lack of connection we have with people. With it, our lives focus on the apparatus and we serve it.<br />Adam B @revhappinessAdam Bhttp://afullnessinbrevity.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-1619373425825265972011-03-25T21:35:10.996-04:002011-03-25T21:35:10.996-04:00I do whatever the little voices tell me to do. Rig...I do whatever the little voices tell me to do. Right now they tell me to say, "Well done!"Tim VanSant Writeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17614259042362664840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-34873519540518892642011-03-25T20:06:12.482-04:002011-03-25T20:06:12.482-04:00Brought the MC paranoia to life with his obbessive...Brought the MC paranoia to life with his obbessive thoughts. I'm thinking this must have more to it with the blood in the coffe line.Now when I hear static I'll have a whole new take on it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-26754483928247319822011-03-25T16:25:33.261-04:002011-03-25T16:25:33.261-04:00You craft a fantastic tale. Scarier because the na...You craft a fantastic tale. Scarier because the narrator understands it's not real.Raven Corinn Carlukhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06014248975870886289noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-32101157999543912902011-03-25T15:22:04.854-04:002011-03-25T15:22:04.854-04:00Ahh, yes, excellent stuff, the voice captured beau...Ahh, yes, excellent stuff, the voice captured beautifully. Bravo.Emma Newmanhttp://www.enewman.co.uknoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-60205634403814419632011-03-25T15:14:14.075-04:002011-03-25T15:14:14.075-04:00Although, in fairness, getting blood in the mornin...Although, in fairness, getting blood in the morning coffee would make anyone get a little stabby.<br /><br />On a serious note, there is a deep power by having the comupter being part of the voices. All the information our brain absorbs is of course bound by our sensory inputs. In turn, so much of our information now comes through the Internets, and some of those voices do want people to hurt others. <br /><br />There is tremendous depth here.D. Paulhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00931977627241091039noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-28932178009439529912011-03-25T12:17:10.282-04:002011-03-25T12:17:10.282-04:00Superb job at getting into the character's hea...Superb job at getting into the character's head Tony! And I know, I've worked with people who think this way, and it's not easy, (as you can well imagine, or maybe know). You nailed the voice!Deanna Schrayerhttp://theothersideofdeanna.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-67752826139688227782011-03-25T10:57:15.179-04:002011-03-25T10:57:15.179-04:00Great peek into the head of someone struggling for...Great peek into the head of someone struggling for sanity. Makes me wonder what he'd do to a laptop.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-66258698009850032012011-03-25T10:16:56.812-04:002011-03-25T10:16:56.812-04:00I loved the sudden realisation that the computer n...I loved the sudden realisation that the computer neither cares nor doesn't care - it's utterly impartial. Yet we're all still compelled by the same anthropomorphism to make it something to which we're a slave.<br /><br />Epic stuff.Icy Sedgwickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-62200066070764094972011-03-25T09:46:55.846-04:002011-03-25T09:46:55.846-04:00Well done Tony. As I write this comment, I too am ...Well done Tony. As I write this comment, I too am fighting with my computer, and the whole "it serves me" part really hit home.<br /><br />I might want to take nail clippers to it too, but for other reasons.<br /><br />Well done.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16518183823230864763noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-12624247656857824852011-03-25T08:30:37.704-04:002011-03-25T08:30:37.704-04:00Hey - you've been peeking in my windows and li...Hey - you've been peeking in my windows and listening at my walls. I'm putting the tinfoil back on my head now.<br />Fantastic piece!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-76062068311604422772011-03-25T08:04:22.168-04:002011-03-25T08:04:22.168-04:00Very nice piece of paranoia writing Tony, there ar...Very nice piece of paranoia writing Tony, there are probably people out there who actually think this way too.<br /><br />PS. I was going to post a longer comment, but the whisperings from my computer told me not to... :)Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-2775537183513555752011-03-25T07:57:27.585-04:002011-03-25T07:57:27.585-04:00The vending machine at my office speaks to me all ...The vending machine at my office speaks to me all the time but usually all it says is, "Psst - wanna buy a chocolate bar?"<br />For gawd's sake, wash the blood out of that coffee cup. It'll make your joe taste funny.Cathy Olliffe-Websterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12729578896443750402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-77468719383487763572011-03-25T07:48:43.467-04:002011-03-25T07:48:43.467-04:00*whispers* I do not hate you. Bring me a coffee an...*whispers* I do not hate you. Bring me a coffee and a cheeseburger. <br /><br />This was very chilling. Excellent voice.Lauritahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03688820247531607677noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-89571198779961488742011-03-25T06:42:20.802-04:002011-03-25T06:42:20.802-04:00Very cool. I love how the reverse psychology or an...Very cool. I love how the reverse psychology or ant-paranoia self-talk displays the incidiousness of the paranoia itself and yet, there's a little bit of truth in this for everyone. We all here the voices to some extent. Don't we?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-64194179417685444822011-03-25T00:57:54.568-04:002011-03-25T00:57:54.568-04:00There was a claustrophobia to these short stabbing...There was a claustrophobia to these short stabbing, repeated sentences which left me feeling genuinely uncomfortable. And by the end; I was infected by the self same paranoia.<br /><br />I do not serve the computer ... the computer serves me ... yeah, right.Jason Cogginshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09509338964933754054noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7797188666559531190.post-77657127357801387282011-03-25T00:56:33.436-04:002011-03-25T00:56:33.436-04:00This comment has been removed by the author.Jason Cogginshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09509338964933754054noreply@blogger.com